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I love when you look at me in the morning
As the sunlight penetrates the curtain slits
And casts serrated streaks across my skin.
In that moment I am not an ice queen,
I am not worrying about work, or hiding behind a façade of astrology.
I am the woman with messy hair and bad breath,
Oversized pajamas, and a compulsion to checking the time.
I am the woman grasping for your arm to drape over my boney shoulder,
Looking for the crevice in your curled body where I can angle mine
And become cocooned with you in threads of silk and cotton.
I am the woman in that moment remembering every past love lost
And praying to some false sense of God that you are finally the last
Sweater I will have to try on.

PS- I love that green sweater,
The one that is a little too small for your arms,
But smells comfortable.
The way Whitman must have felt
The second he planted his head on the grass.
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To you.

As usual I feel that it is very cliche. It's just lacking... something, and I'm not sure what it is.

Anyone, help!
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:iconlayrablack:
It may sound cliché to you, but I like the last lines, the ones aobut the sweater :)

Hope everything's good with you Kirsten ;)
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:iconfuzzmanebaku:
"I am the woman in that moment remembering every past love lost
And praying to some false sense of God that you are finally the last
Sweater I will have to try on." ♥ What an amazing line. =) This is beautiful, Kirsten. I especially like that you reference Whitman. ;) (I love references I actually get ... and seeing your inner-lit nerd peeking out)
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~singovermyradio Jan 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
hahaha, I love allusions too! I never include them because I want everybody to understand my lines, but sometimes I just do it.

And thank you! :)
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:iconcsnyder:
heart-felt and endearing:hug:
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~singovermyradio Jan 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)
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